the lost knight of darksands

[reviewerman]

Name: conan sharp
Nickname/Alias: rev/reviewerman
Age: 20
Gender: Male
Race: dwarven
Height: 5ft
Weight: 7stone
Hair: long red hair and beard which is kept hidden under his chanmail
Eyes: dark blue
Skin: Average White
Identifying Marks: the logo of A.H over his front and back
Appearance: seems angry all the time and all his armour is gone so he is just left with chainmail. he also tries to hid hes a dwarven for unknown reasons

chapter 1
it was just another day at the fort. sitting down waiting with his diamond sword and armour on waiting and waiting and waiting. its all he'd done for the last 6 months. It had been 6 months since that horrible day, the day of the attack.
there he was standig upright ready for another monster, he knew there was about 1 monster a day even the occaisional creeper. this is what gave him the fun in this town, the only other slightly fun thing was to build up the house for his wife to get home so he could show it off.
but then he heard the sound he loved to hear and a zobie climbed over the low walls of the town.
evreryone else screamed as he ran down the steps of the fort and to the zombie. he stabbed the diamond sword into the zombies head and the zombie was done for. but then a terrible storm came and more and more skeletons and zombies appeard climbing over the walls. even creepers were chasing people around town. he knew he was the only trained fighter in the village so he had to do this alone. he knew he would die for this village and thats what drove him, he slashed and sliced with his sword until he heard a scream. a scream that put his hair on end. it was his wife!
he had told her to go into the house and she did so, and when he looked behind him there wer monsters flooding into the house while more came over the wall to attack the townsfolk. what could he do

 

[Mario Mluigifish]

XD

 

[reviewerman]

chapter 2
he looked around to see if he had time to save his wife. But he had to face that there was no time. If he tried the other townsfolk would be killed. Inside he tried to think of a way to save her as he slashed at the endless amounts of monsters pouring over the city walls like a tidal wave. But all that came out was anger. An anger thats would burn forever, the anger that kept him alive that night and has to this day. He was always a happy person till that moment. That night devestated the village buildings and caused many seirious injuries. But suprisingly only one person was killed, his wife. Instead of being sad about her death he was angrier. From that day he swore he would kill every darn monster that was in his sight. For the next 3 months the townsfolk never heard much from him unlike usual. They didnt hear much of monsters attacking either. But everyday in the for he grew angrier. He even grew angry with the townsfolk. He had a hidden secret. The townsfolk hated dwarvens and thought they decended from Kilrox so they burned the dwarves they saw on sight and he was a dwarven. The nearby dwarvens had a peaceful town quite far away from salkra (the town he works at in the future). They lived happily there and he was always saying how much he wanted to be a dwarven knight fighting the monsters. Then for his 7th birthday his parents bought him chainmail so he could look the part. Later that day a man from salkra came leading a mob of angry townsfolk. Turned out the man had been hunting and saw the village. The mob set alight to all the houses in the village with the dwarvens in them. His parents had been ready for a day like this and had developed a secret passage out of the village from their house. But the fire was burning faster than anticipated and only one person could escape and that was him. His parent said to go to salkra and pretend he was a normal human. He did so and every step he was crying. when he got there he said his parents had died and he had been travveling for years . the townsfolk welcomed him in and as he grew up his chainmail hid his beard he knew if he showed it he would be killed along with his stunted growth that he said was just unlucky. To this day he is still scared to show his beard. And with this anger toward the townsfolk he planned an atack.

 

[Mario Mluigifish]

.......One thing how this cant work "The townsfolk hated dwarvens and thought they decended from Kilrox so the burned the dwarfs they saw on sight,"
Is this in A.H?? I hope not because then you might have to re-write that whole chapter. Apart from that...