vshorts' Application [Declined - MRPolo]

[Vshorts]

1. What is your minecraft username?
Vshorts
2. How old are you?
16
3. What gender are you?
male
4. What country do you live in?
Usa
5a. Do you agree to read our Survival Guide before logging onto the server?
Yes
5b. Do you agree to consult both our Tome of Citizenship and Everything you need to know page before asking any questions in the game?
Yes
6. Please provide a lengthy in-character introduction.
Vshorts real name is jack he is a short stubby fat man who lives by him self Who loves building house and helping other to build there house if they like the that little bit of help. He just can't to find friend he is a nice person but everyone just seems to just walk on past him we he try to talk to people but one thing that jake had on his side is his one on one combat with his kick and flying dropkick

7. Please introduce yourself to the community; explaining who you are, what your interests and/or hobbies are and why you would like to be a part of our community in around 8 sentences or more. You do not have to disclose any personal information if you don't want to, but we'd just like to know what kind of person you are.
hi I'm jake I'm for Usa i play on minecraft server mostly everyday but i never find a one with out any hackers and i was hoping to join this server and there would be no hackers. in the server i would like to join a town and talk to people and build and mine and just have a good time with other people
8. Do you have any examples of your work and creativity, either in minecraft or outside? You can attach them to this post using the "upload a file" button or link to the image or video.
no sorry
9. Is there anything else you wish to share with us?
ur server looks really good
10. Are you aware that the use of black magic (xray,xray texture packs and ore locator mods) is not allowed on our server, and a banishable offense?
Yes
11. How did you find out about our server?
it was on a website
12. Have you voted for us? (Click Here)
Yes

 

[dogbew]

For number 6 your supposed to be in character, meaning you would type it as your Rp would say, not describing what you would want to play as. It also asks to be lengthy, so i would say 5 or 6 sentences, and perhaps a couple comma's to break up those run-on sentences.
For number 7 it asks to be 8 sentences or more, you gave 2 sentences. I would consider fixing those if i were you. You may also want to consider using Capital letters and Correct punctuation.

 

[MRPolo13]

As Dogbew beat me to it, there are 2 points that require fixing.
This is basically me repeating Dog with more details in.
Question 6 needs to be long and needs to be an introduction to your story. It's not a description of your character, and while naming yourself and giving most basic details about your character is good, the main point is to create a lengthy story about how you got to Northern Kingdoms.
Question 7 needs 8 sentences or more, no less. You can talk about your real life hobbies, what you are good at, plans for future et cetera.

 

[MRPolo13]

This application is declined because you didn't reply to this thread for too long. Feel free to reapply.