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Roleplay character-Footle1

Footle1

Villager
Name: Vryian Stormwalker
Nickname/Alias: Duke
Age: 28
Gender: Male
Race: Human
Height: 5 foot
Weight: 16 Stone
Hair:Short brown scruffy hair.
Eyes: Brown and glistening
Skin:Tanned (brown)
Identifying Marks: A deer like scar on his shoulder and a birth mark on his back.
Appearance: Strong and sturdy due to his time in the field also he has a nature like aura due to his time around his crops
Strengths: He has always been strong due to him spending most of his time tilling the fields.However he has always been one with nature and is stealthy when in a suitable enviroment.
Weaknesses and fears: He has always been afraid of the dark due to his fathers death when he went outside to protect the crops from monsters which where spawned from the very pits of corruption his father was struck down by these demons and taken away by them his whereabouts are unknown.
Religion and cults: as he has been one with nature he worships Shalherana but as he believes in the good of Altera he also worships Harateth.
Profession: He is a farmer; he chose this career after his mothers death (shortley after his fathers disapperance) and took over the family farm.
Backstory: Vryian was born into a loving family with both a great mother and father he had a great life untill one day he woke up to the sounds of the groaning undead he rushed outside to see to his suprise his father being carried away by the monsters. He ran after his dad but the monsters seemed to disappear after a while.The next day he spent the whole time in the forest weeping about his dad.Suddenley in a flash of light a druid appeared to him and told him of his fathers disapperance she then cast here hand over him and the deer like scar found its self onto his shoulder,from that day on Vryian vowed that he would get revenge on those monsters but after he had sorted out his family.
 

Itzzaboy

King ForumStalker
A good start, if you plan on continuing the backstory may I recommend a few things?

  • Take the story a bit slower, you seemed to pass through a lifetime in a few sentences.
  • Talk about the emotions of Vryian, isn't he curious about this druid who suddenly appears before him?
  • Explain about the father. In the profile you speak of his disappearance but there is no mention of this in the backstory.
  • Why would getting a scar from a druid equate to Vryian wanting revenge for his family? The way you wrote it sounds like he all of a sudden wanted revenge when the druid gave him a totally unrelated scar.
Just a few pointers to help you out :p
 
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