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Star Wars - Fan fiction, Revan [Violence, Gore, Probably language]

CaliburofSouls

CaliburofSouls

Lord of Altera
"Halt!" The Republic guards golden armour shimmers and reflects in the artificial light coming from the huge buildings and lamps around Coruscant. His hand out, He starts demanding we leave, Not that I'm listening to him. "I told you to shove off, Citizens!" He demands once again. "Now, That's not very hospitable is it, Now?" I say, Voice mocking him. "Leave, Or I'll have to escort you. You don't want that." I wave my hand in front of his face, And he appears to go into a trance. "Let us in, We're with the Republic." He nods. "You're with the Republic, Sorry, Enter please." He steps to the side and allows us access into the huge, Circular building. Being with the Republic was a complete lie, But mind tricks are a good way to get a secret meeting. "Ah, Revan, Welcome." The voice of Darth Nihilus fills the room. I nod at him, And take a seat at a large circular table. "Make it quick, We have things to do." I say, Taking my mask off and placing it on the table. "Well, Revan, A mission has just come up for you and Malak." "Well, Tell us what it is, Then." Malak answers, Expressionless.

Nihilus speaks for an hour or two, 'Briefing' us of our mission, Then lets us leave. I picked my mask up off the table, And put it on. I walk out of the building, And the Republic soldier looks and me, Then it finally clicks in his head. "Darth Revan!" He shouts, Then goes to pull out his blaster. With reflexes of a Jedi, I flick out my lightsaber, The blade melting through the guards armour and slashing through his waist, Separating his torso from his legs. He screams in pain, And the crimson blade melts back into the pommel. "So we're going to Hoth then.." Malak thinks aloud, And I look at him. "Yes. Pack some winter clothes, It's going to be freaking freezing."

The cruiser lands on Hoth, Finally. As I had stated, It's bloody cold. I walk out of the ship, And my feet sink into the ankle-deep snow. We walk for a couple of minutes, I put my hand out to stop Malak, And we both crouch down in the snow. There, In the snow, Speaking to some Republic soldiers, Was a Jedi. I look to Malak, And nod. We both stand up and unhook our Lightsabers from our waists, And the crimson blades melt out of their pommels, With that great sound. I take my other Lightsaber off of my belt, And press the button. A purple blade melts out, And I approach the Jedi, Who turns and gives us a hard look. "Sith!" One Republic soldier shouts, And takes out his blaster, He pulls the trigger, Shooting sizzling lasers at us. I deflect one and it goes back and slams into his chest, Knocking him down, His armour protecting him from any serious damage. The Jedi's blue blade melts out of his Lightsaber's pommel. Running at me, He propels himself into the air, Attempting to bring the blade down onto me. I jump to the side, And slash at him, He blocks, Then parries and nearly slices me. "You're good at this, Jedi." I say, As our blades clash against each other. "I'll kill you, Darth Revan!" I smirk, And flick his lightsaber out of the way with one of mine, Then stab at him with the other, Which melts through his chest like a hot knife through butter. I pull upwards, And slice his head in half completely. I then quickly turn and slice a Republic soldiers arms off, Then his head. Malak finishes the last soldier, And we continue walking.
 
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Rextoret

Rextoret

Lord of Altera
Might keep my eye on this. I've always loved SWTOR, mostly because it was a great game - far ahead of it's time if you ask me. I hope you can keep this going.
 
Rextoret

Rextoret

Lord of Altera
Cool. Also, as a tip from a fellow fan-fiction writer, try to remember that there's no need to capitalize letters after a comma.

"Hey, When's the next meet?" [Incorrect]
"Hey, when's the next meet?" [Correct]

Have fun writing this. If you need any help with writing, I'm almost always free. Besides when I'm working or writing, which is 95% of the time. Still, just PM me if you need help. :3
 
CaliburofSouls

CaliburofSouls

Lord of Altera
Rextoret said:
Cool. Also, as a tip from a fellow fan-fiction writer, try to remember that there's no need to capitalize letters after a comma.

"Hey, When's the next meet?" [Incorrect]
"Hey, when's the next meet?" [Correct]

Have fun writing this. If you need any help with writing, I'm almost always free. Besides when I'm working or writing, which is 95% of the time. Still, just PM me if you need help. :3
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:p I know about the comma, Just a habit I do when typing.. And to me it looks terrible without capital letters after commas :p I'm stubborn that way.
 
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