Tdoggy27 updated lore Application [Declined - Snerus]

[tdoggy27]

1. What is your Minecraft username?
tdoggy27 is my minecraft username.

2. How old are you?
I am currently 24 years old.

3. What country are you from?
I am from the United States.

4. Have you read the King's Law, Tome of Citizenship, Official Lore, and the Survival Guides yet?
Yes I have read all the guides listed above .

5. In your own words, how would you define metagaming and powergaming?
Metagaming is when you bring in knowledge from the outside world into the roleplay world. Power gaming is hard to describe but its like making yourself out to be all powerfull or its when you do something to someone else with out giving them a chance to react.

6. Do we allow X-Raying mods or X-Ray texture packs on the server?
Xray mods or textures are not allowed on this server and I agree 100 percent with it .

7. Name one of our current Mentors.
One of the current mentors is Squidziod

8. Tell us about yourself!
Hello my real name is Taylor.I have a dog named bob. I named my dog after the great singer Bob marley. I live in Bakersfield California "the most polluted city in america" I used to belong to a club called S.A.L. sheriffs activity league. There we did many things such as dodgeball, flag football,baseball, and basketball.
The music i listen to is mostly hiphop and a little country my favorite singers include lil wayne, kanye west, jay-z, tupac, Biggie smalls... and alot others.
My in game name is tdoggy27. I have been playing minecraft since October 4,2010. I am experienced player in classic and smp. I am currently in the united states army. I am a combat medic 68W health care specialist. I am currently deployed in Qatar right now.I like roleplaying my favorite characters are usually werewolf's which i hope to be on here. I also play imprisoned server its fun.I have play classic tnt blocktopia. I have been an operator in many servers such as Crocodiles freebuild.

9. Do you have any examples of your work?
Examples of my work can be found here. http://hollowworld.co.uk/threads/tdoggy27-whitelist-application-approved-sally.12412/

10. Did anyone refer you? If not, how did you find our server?
I have been playing on this server since 2012. I believe I found this server through google.
About Your Character!
Character Name:
Dante Lefur

Character Age:
57

Character Race:
Human

Appearance:
Hair color Gray. facial hair white. Eyes greenish. blue shirt with black pants

(Optional) Picture of the Skin:
http://static.planetminecraft.com/f...ew/PlanetMinecraft_minecraft_skin-3191637.jpg

Written Test!
So this is the tale of Dante Lefur. Dante used to live in the winter town of snowfall there he lived with his wife and two kids. Dante was a lumber jack he spent most of the time in the woods cutting down trees all the hours of the day. He lived a humble life, he was friendly to his neighbors a hard worker he rarely complained and got along with every one.

One winter day when he was in church when there was a rumor going around that a nearby village was raided and pillage by salvages. At the time Dante did not think anything of it he had other things on he mind like how he was going to pay this months rent. The next day he went to his boss to ask for a raise. His boss just laughed and told him if he wants more money he has to put in more hours. So that is exactly what he did, He stayed late that day at work then the next day and the Next. He spent then next two Weeks working late. During one of the days he was staying up working he was busy chopping down a tree When he heard screaming coming from his village. So he took off running as fast as he can to see what the screaming was coming from.

When he got to the village what he saw he could not believe there was blood and bodys everywhere. The rumors were not rumors the city was raided houses were burning down left and right. Fearing what might have happened to his family he took off running to his house. When he got there he saw his wife lying on the ground bleeding out. She was not dead yet, she told Dante they took the boys "you got to save our boys....." was the last thing that came out of her dying body.

Dante spent his whole life looking for his children. He went from town to town looking for them picking up mercenary jobs as he went to make a living. He never found his kids no matter how hard he tried and no matter how far he went there was just no sign of them anywhere. He even question his own mental strength. The days turn to weeks, the weeks turn to month, the months turn to years. He was loosing all hope until he heard rumors of 2 men that looked just like him were living in a near by land. So he took off to this land, he took off to Altera....

 

[Squidziod]

I can't accept this app until you redo your written test. Except for the last sentence, it's exactly the same.

Now, the rest of your application is fine. Although you changed the race, and fixed the eye color, your actual written test is still the same, and it still doesn't work. We don't allow the fantasy creatures of old, so that means no mermaids, vampires, golems, or werewolves. You can't start with magic or special enchantments. Please just go off of the lore we have down and stick to the basics. I'm sure whatever you come up with will be great, and I look forward to reading it! It's always nice to see an old player come back, so thanks for being patient and working with us.

Please message this forum when you've updated the written test, and I'll have a second look.

 

[tdoggy27]

yea my bad. I changed it to the lore and even changed it up a bit so Dante has a reason to be there.

 

[Snerus]

Hi there. I'm taking this app from Squidziod.

The concern voiced last time was that the written test given to us from your original presentation was inappropriate as it violated our established server lore. While this is no longer the case with your new application, I'd really appreciate it if you put the same time and effort into making the new test as you did into making the old one. As Squidziod said, we'd really appreciate it if you re-wrote your test, instead of just re-writing some of it.

I'm going to decline this application for now, but you are free to make another one. Thanks.

 

[tdoggy27]

wait a minute why was it declined i changed the test?

 

[tdoggy27]

This is started to get ridiculous. I put in effort making a story the would have got accepted in this server back in my day but I can understand it has updated lore. So I changed the lore to make it appropriate but its declined because it has elements of the old story. Makes no sense to me I was never told to make a whole new story. Wasting both of our times just to redo a story on how this character came to be. I changed the race, I changed the back story. Dont judge this app because it has parts of an old app. If that app never existed this would be accepted but because that one does this is declined how does that make sense.

 

[tdoggy27]

either way its all good made another application hope it works.